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I Hate Myself For Loving You by ~jack-cade:iconjack-cade:



in intermittent jolts, like a train carriage butting
its forerunner, like the hairs shot by my electric

razor straight into the beartrap of my lashes
or the stutter of rain on a day like this one - like

how I strike through my To Do list, or how I make up
my mind to do something, like cannonfire or Nicholas

Cage acting well or like phonecalls from home
or the shower's skutting start, the goliath wave

that turns over the boat. I know this is no way
to do it - and I know, just as well as you know

I should love you like a bobsleigh
run, like the laser gun in Metal

Slug, like the wind that won't leave
my Homburg alone or the adverts

that play in the cinema foyer
like I drink when I get in from running.
©2007-2009 ~jack-cade
:iconjack-cade:

Author's Comments

This is for *salshep's 'Daylight Bobbery' competition. The title is from 'Dirge' on 'Planet Waves' by Bob Dylan and the Band. I think I could do better, but the idea came too late, and it's midnight and I finally have some work the next day!

Daily Deviation

Given 2007-03-19

I Hate Myself For Loving You by *jack-cade is the winner of the 'Daylight Bobbery' contest - the poem takes a line from a Bob Dylan song and riffs off it to create a series of couplets. (Featured by `PoeticWar)

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:iconsalshep:
:star: Congratulations on being THE WINNER of the Daylight Bobbery Contest! :star:

You have won a three-month subscription, which will be sent to you asap. Thankyou very much for participating.

- Sal


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:iconjack-cade:
Superthanks, Sal! That's brill!

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:iconsalshep:
Aaaand because someone hacked my paypal account, it shall be a little late, but is on the way. :(

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Late is fine! I got it now and am well please I am.

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:iconoibyrd:
congrats on your dd! :clap:

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Always remember you're unique, just like everyone else.
:iconstormqueen:
congrats on the dd!
you deserve it!

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"The multiple use of exclamation marks is a sure sign of a diseased mind." - Terry Pratchett
:iconfailing-at-flight:
Wow, just to show you how messed up deviantART is, only 4 favorites? After a DD? Wow.
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I wish I could write. All my stuff sucks :lol:

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Do you realize where he thinks he comes from?
:iconventurus:
believe i've faved this one already. clean, snappy and playful. good work, Cade!

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Mimesis
:iconobsessive-pyromania:
Simply beautifully written, it's so confused and tormented, and I love the simple structure

xxx

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   :trout:

:heart:"Lets follow the cops back home, and rob their houses...":heart:

"You make me sad in the pants" - ~neo-kaiser
:icondirty-paint:
pretty cool.

I like the amount of detail you use, and it's simple,
yet very beautiful.

Great job :3

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